i lost my hands in the hair of the girl i was with last night.
i lost my heart to someone else who felt just right.
i lost my mind to the inane technological work i do.
i lost my breath to the woman on the bus whom i knew.
i lost my voice to the demon who lives in the pit of my belly.
i lost my legs to him too, and now they're jelly.
i am not me anymore,
i belong to
the girls i love,
and the boss i dread,
and the maniacal voice inside my head.
5 comments:
ooeee. very nice. i think you rhyme better than most people i know. :)
like the rhyme pattern as always. moreso liked the change of rhythm sudden after the six lines. great voice - melancholic.
seems incomplete and haphazard. losing is way too different from belonging. and when i lose something to a person or a thing, that doesn't mean i belong to that person or the thing. so why does the second stanza suddenly have belonging there?
impudence: *cough cough at the name!*
thankee :)
dheepika b:
never lost yourself to something, someone or to plain insanity? heh. we shall talk :)
ah very nice! life can start to feel like all these different parts of you are for other people. i can relate.
word verification: barking. haha!
LOL. i did make a reference to the name and you some three posts back on my blog. but do you ever read it.. nooooooooooooo. oh and thank you. praise from you means a lot. :)
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